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I have never felt that kiss.
That kiss you see in movies
Where two faces linger in close proximity
Hovering uncertain of the chemical reaction
That comes when trembling lips meet.

My first kiss came with hungry intent
Forceful and probing.
The weight of his body against me
His hands holding down my arms above my head
I could not have been more willing
Or more surprised.

When I kissed my second love
It was full of fumbling and uncertainly
But that was not his lips.
By the time we were face to face
All hesitancy was gone.

The next time my mouth touched fresh lips
He had led me by the hand to his bed
There was no mystery no uncertainty
Of what lay ahead
When our lips met our hands were already
Tearing away the others clothes.

And then that day
Not so long ago
In the bustling cafeteria
His deep blue eyes pulling me in
His golden curls pooling around his face
I wanted so to lean abruptly in
Until our lips collided
Drawn together by inexorable forces
As if I had no say.

Would he have parted his lips
To let my tongue slip gently in?
Would he have pulled back in sharp surprise
Misread and appalled?
For so many reasons the moment passed
Without that spark of contact
And I will never know.
more bad poetry?
or is it poorly punctuated prose?
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Jaylayson Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2011
Wow
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montroytana Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2011
thanks trace
i love it when people like my poetry
i write so little of it
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Jaylayson Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2011
It's excellent.
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skinflute69 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2011
You're masterful at warming the heart and soul, bringing us to the height of fantasy before giving us a dose of reality. Poignant....
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Lindzgal Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2009   Writer
i think this is brilliant. love the way you just let it all out. I know thats a good thing. this makes for the best poetry.

you wait to write until you "feel it"...and it seems here you did just that!
nice writing i must say!
Linda
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ShadowFalcon89 Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
uh.. huh. interesting?... of course, i say that about a lot of your work. not necessarily bad, just interesting. i think it could work better.
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montroytana Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2009
it all just comes out
i have no control of the quality
lol
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ShadowFalcon89 Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
well, that's good. it has a rather raw quality.
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AquartistJames Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2009  Student General Artist
:D
I love your poems: they're few and far between but they are amazing. :)
I know exactly what you meant when you wrote this, I think every guy gets all those kisses at some point.

"That kiss you see in movies
Where two faces linger in close proximity
Hovering uncertain of the chemical reaction
That comes when trembling lips meet."

Golden. :+fav:
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montroytana Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2009
thanks james
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